Hey Iab! I've read one of your stories already, The Lion and the Rabbit. I still agree with what I said about how writing in the point of view of the lion really shows how arrogant he was first hand. Your story flowed well and there wasn't any mistakes that I caught when I read it again. I would say that my favorite story in your portfolio would be Mother Wolf. It was very sweet, Mother Wolf was able to look past a grudge and take care of a human child. The part that you put about how she was questioning whether she should take Ailbe. It really helps us as readers feel her pain. How could she save something that could grow up and hurt her? This story, like the other ones, are very well written and flow really well. Again, there aren't any mistakes that I caught. Good job!
Hey Iab! I've read one of your stories already, The Lion and the Rabbit. I still agree with what I said about how writing in the point of view of the lion really shows how arrogant he was first hand. Your story flowed well and there wasn't any mistakes that I caught when I read it again. I would say that my favorite story in your portfolio would be Mother Wolf. It was very sweet, Mother Wolf was able to look past a grudge and take care of a human child. The part that you put about how she was questioning whether she should take Ailbe. It really helps us as readers feel her pain. How could she save something that could grow up and hurt her? This story, like the other ones, are very well written and flow really well. Again, there aren't any mistakes that I caught. Good job!
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